W.A.L.T- Describe a moment in time with the inspiration of a picture.
I hope you enjoy my writing. I found writing about this was cool, I really like using my imagination and picturing myself in this moment. Feel free to comment my blog!
Here is the picture I wrote about!
Journey to Home
My sweaty fists clenched the rope trying to keep my balance. I could feel my legs shaking under me like I was about to slip into the cold murky water, who knew what was in it?! Watching my feet move across the rotting planks, I heard a plank plunge into the water instantly seizing my attention. All I could hear was the water thrashing against the bank and could only smell the smelly sweat that fell from my forehead invading my nostrils threatening to choke me. I felt sorry for the people behind me as they waited for me to take my time walking across the bridge. I wondered if this was going to be the end of me and my class.
Hi Cybella,
ReplyDeleteI like the hook you used at the start, it makes me wonder why you're there and what you're doing. Maybe next time you could use different descriptive words. Instead of "could only smell the smelly sweat" you could put "could only smell the deadly scent of sweat" or something.
-Rebekah